Shape Thesaurus Entry: Tube
Valves (heart, etc)
Green onion stems
Sea urchin spines
Pipes (copper, metal, PVC)
A pencil with no lead
A pen with no ink chamber
Tunnel (subway, mine shafts, etc)
Tube slides/Water slides
Dental Suction tool
Rigatoni, macaroni shells
Chinese finger trap
cylinder, column, pipe, hollow, duct, pipeline
Describing a shape is best done in as few words as possible. Think of the shape as a camera snap shot--you want to capture the gist of what you mean as soon as possible so you can get on with other related (and more important) detail, and the action happening in the scene
A weak example:
Rot had eaten the core of the giant oak stump, turning it into a test tube to hold the rain fall.
What's wrong with this example?
In a natural setting, the visual should not only be apt, but also complementary. Creating a comparison to a scientific implement in this case sanitizes the descriptive imagery.
A strong example:
Rot had eaten the core of the giant oak stump, leaving a circular hollow set in its heart--a perfect home for forest creatures to nest in.
Why does this work?
This description is balanced in keeping with the natural setting.
Posted by Angela Ackerman