Color Thesaurus Entry: Transparent
Real World Comparisons:
Clean rivers, streams, lakes
Amber, diamonds and other similar gemstones
Plastic slip covers
Peephole in door
Glass of water
Sprite/7up/club soda/tonic water
Synonyms of Clear:
Clear, unclouded, translucent, sheer, crystalline, gossamer, vaporous, gauzy, see-through
Make every detail count
Colors are powerful descriptors, not fillers. Make sure that if you use a comparison or contrast to highlight a color, you choose the right one. Look at the setting and atmosphere you are working to create, then draw from the viewpoint character or narrator's history, education and past experiences to find the right fit.
A poor example:
A light mist clung to the graveyard like a dead man's breath.
What's wrong with this example?
At first look, this seems nice and creepy, perfect for a graveyard description. But then you have to think, Um...dead men don't breathe, so in actuality the mist would be invisible, which we all know is not the case.
A strong example:
A light mist clung to the graveyard like smoke huddled above a funeral pyre.
Why is this example better?
This one lines up logically and still provides atmosphere by creating a comparison to death.
Posted by Angela Ackerman