Shape Entry: Star




Natural:

Star anise
Apple core cross section
Star fish
Balloon flower
Lilly
Tomato stem
Mystic vine
Maple leaves
Sweet gum leaves
Star wort
Seed placement in a pomegranate
Star fruit

Man-made:

Star of David
Sheriff's badge
Christmas tree topper
Star of Fame
Gold star stickers
Wheel rims
Star Spangled Banner
Star sapphire

Synonyms:

Pentagram, hexagram, pentacle, starred

Describing a shape is best done in as few words as possible. Think of the shape as a camera snap shot--you want to capture the gist of what you mean as soon as possible so you can get on with other related (and more important) detail, and the action happening in the scene

A weak example:

Her bright, dangly earrings dragged on her lobes like two gargantuan sweet gum leaves.

What's wrong with this example?

The shape and size is right, but how heavy are sweet gum leaves, or any leaf for that matter?

A strong example:

Her bright, dangly earrings dragged on her lobes like two gargantuan gold-plated starfish.

Why does this work?

Here the shape, size and weight are all right. Plus, using a live creature (or formerly alive) as a comparison only adds to the ridiculous image.

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9 comments:

PJ Hoover said...

Great one! Star is such a wonderful thing to find in nature. I love the natural examples the best!

Ann Finkelstein said...

These are fun.

Bish Denham said...

I just HAVE to add the star fruit or carambola. Not only delicious, but when cut the slices look just like a 5 pointed star.

Angela said...

Thanks PJ & Ann. :)

I had star fruit on there too...I wonder what happened to it? I have blogger gremlins, people--no matter, I've re-added it. Thanks for spotting that, Bish.

Roni @ FictionGroupie said...

These are great. Thanks. :)

wordwranglernc said...

Again...great post. I listed this blog as one of my favorites today while posting to a yahoo group. The question was something like, "How do you tighten your writing skills?" I said I read blogs about writing...and THIS was one of my three favorites. :)

Fantastic job, y'all.
peace,
Donna

Angela said...

Thanks Roni! (Every time I see your avatar I want to hold up a zippo and sway to the music, lol)

Wordwrangler, gosh what high praise!! I'm so glad that you find this blog so helpful! :)

Joanne said...

Brevity is beautiful! Great post here, thanks for stopping by Whole Latte Life.

Mary Witzl said...

Bish has beat me to it: I was going to suggest star fruit too. (I've got typo gremlins on my blog. I spell words perfectly, then the minute my back is turned, they have their wicked way with them.)

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