CTS Entry: Foamy/Spongy


Natural:

Wet (foamy)

Waves hitting the shore
Spittle bugs (foam on plants)
Fresh cows milk
White caps or breakers
Scum on ponds
Fish egg clusters
Betta fish bubble nests
Bubbles trapped in water
Saliva

Dry (spongy)

Sea sponge
Poodle fur
Seed pod fluff (trees, plants)
Moss
Mushrooms
Fungus
Forest floor (undergrowth)
Dry lichen
Lush grass
Fruit pith (oranges, pomegranates)
Rotten wood


Man-made:

Wet (Foamy)

Root bear foam
Beer foam
Bubble bath
Hot tub bubbles
Shampoo lather
Spray cleaners
Fake spray snow for windows
Whipped cream
Mousse
Latte/cappuccino foam

Dry (spongy)

Fiberglass insulation
Bread
Tofu
Cleaning sponges
Foam finger wavers at sporting events
Gym mats
Styrofoam
Memory foam mattresses
Bubble wrap
Pillows
Twinkies
Doughnuts
Cake
Scrambled eggs
Bath mats
Pancakes
Dried apple slices

Synonyms:

Foamy: frothy, sudsy, bubbly, lather, yeasty, whipped, spume

Spongy: springy, peaty, porous, airy, fluffy, cushioned

Describing texture in a story creates intimacy between reader and character, and can even cause an emotional trigger for both. To anchor the reader in the scene, make sure comparisons and contrasts are clear and relatable, and within the scope of the narrator's life knowledge and experience.

A weak example:

Off the trail I lay back on the thick, springy moss to look up at the tree tops, squirming to find a spot where a tree root isn't poking through nature's mattress.

What's wrong with this example?

There's conflicting detail happening here--the moss is described as thick and springy suggesting comfort, then the image is ruined by tree roots poking through the undergrowth. If the moss was truly thick as suggested, roots would not be felt to the extent that it would be discomforting.

A strong example:

I find a spot off the main trail and lay back on the thick, springy moss to look up at the tree tops. Even the well established cedar roots cannot breach nature's mattress.

Why does this example work?

The details here support one another--the roots are there, but are not bothersome due to the thickness of the moss.


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3 comments:

C.R. Evers said...

cool picture and another great list!

Angela said...

Thanks!

Christina Farley said...

How do you think of all these things? Really, it's amazing. I'm addicted to your blog whenever I'm stuck. I've decided you have to keep this blog going for at least as long as i'm writing, which at this rate could be for a while! :)

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