CTS Entry: Crumbly
Posted by Angela Ackerman
Sap crust on pine/spruce trees
Whole grain flour
Cheese (gorgonzola, bleu, lancashire, cheshire, feta)
Historic castle walls or buildings
Buildings in war torn nations
Crushed graham crackers
berry cobblers or strudels
Dried concrete leftovers
Loose plaster or stone cobbles
Dried sugar crust
Synonyms: brittle, deteriorated, friable, powdery, pilled, clumped, lumpy
Describing texture in a story creates intimacy between reader and character, and can even cause an emotional trigger for both. To anchor the reader in the scene, make sure comparisons and contrasts are clear and relatable, and within the scope of the narrator's life knowledge and experience.
A weak example:
I brushed at my blouse, the cookie globs falling off like old barn paint.
What's wrong with this example?
This is close-but-not-quite-there description. Globs suggest a roundish, bulkier shape, whereas old barn paint suggests slivering flakes.
A strong example:
I brushed at my blouse, the cookie globs falling off like sun-baked clay at the edge of a cliff.
Why does this example work?
Here the imagery shapes line up just a touch better.