Setting Thesaurus Entry: Alley

Sight

Crates, garbage, garbage bins, empty liquor bottles, broken glass, plastic, oil spills, puddles, dirt, grime, grease, ratty blankets, cardboard, homeless people, rats, cockroaches, spiders, ants, bird that eat refuse (magpies, pigeons, etc), street cats or dogs, mice, employees on smoke breaks, broken & discarded furniture, dead tires, graffiti, vomit, mold, mildew, newspapers/leaflets, grimy barred windows and doorways, chain link fences, flickering streetlamps, broken lights, brick walls, peeling paint, cracked pavement, pot holes, small signs on doors with the business name on it, signs that say "loading area", "Private" or "No loitering", parked or broken down cars, crime (muggings, drunken brawls, murders, break ins)


Sounds

Wind shuffling trash into corners, dogs rooting through garbage, cats meowing, people coughing/talking in low voices or snoring if the alley is inhabited, music from clubs with back entrances, the clink of bottles, a trash bin lid slamming down, the crinkle of a trash bag as it's emptied into a bin, garbage lids being knocked to the ground, the jingle of keys as a door is locked/unlocked, shouting, glass shattering, the clatter of chain link fence as someone climbs over it to escape, the sputter of a car being turned over, chatter/footsteps & car noise from the adjoining street, far-off wailing of a siren, overheard arguments from building tenants in residential areas, music/TV/laughter/arguing from open windows, groaning as someone gets sick, shuffling footsteps through alley debris, the rattling wheels of a homeless person's shopping cart, feet scuffling down steps, swearing as bouncers throw someone out of a club or drinking establishment



Smells

Rotting garbage, body odor, animal and human waste, motor oil, cooking smells drifting from open windows or restaurants, wet cardboard, mildew, vomit, 'beer smell' from broken bottles, cigarette smoke & butts, moldy furniture, car exhaust

Tastes

Bagged lunch from shelters, leftovers from restaurant bins, alcohol, cigarettes, vomit

Touch

The rough bricks beneath the hand, using the wall to steady one's walk, falling in a pile of garbage from drunkenness, grime sticking to the shoes, litter crunching underfoot, the cold metal of a garbage bin lid, forcing a heavy garbage bin open, rattling a discarded bottle to see if it has any alcohol in it, the sudden click of a switchblade opening, the prod of a gun or blade during a mugging, pain at being pushed, shoved, punched, kicked or otherwise beaten, tripping against debris left in the alley, sifting through garbage for something usable, accidentally stepping in a cold oily pool of water, slipping in motor oil, metal wire digging into fingers as you climb a chain link fence, shattering a window with an elbow, using a shoulder against a door to break in, ripping a pull handle or door knob, leaning against the wall, sleeping on a musty & legless couch


Helpful hints:


--The words you choose can convey atmosphere and mood.

Example 1: The wind was howling like a pack of arctic wolves, but hunkered down under his newspaper-and-scraps blanket, Alfred could barely feel it. The bricks at his back were warm from the ovens on the other side. He took a deep breath, smelling the fresh-baked scent and hardly any dumpster at all. Pulling his rough cap down over his eyes, he burrowed into his warm corner with a smile.

Example 2: Matilda gave the doorstep a final, crisp sweep, then looked around in satisfaction. The dumpster was still dingy but sat straight in its corner, where it should have been from the beginning. The wet smell of whitewashed walls assured her that, for now, her alley was graffiti-free. Something skittered in the corner. Matilda cocked her broom and advanced on the sound, eyes cutting to the rat holes, but the concrete she'd filled them with still held. Ah...a rogue leaf. She dropped it in the dumpster and swept her way back inside, shutting the door behind her with the confidence of a job well done.


--Similes and metaphors create strong imagery when used sparingly.

Example 1: (Simile) The smell in the alley was overwhelming, like a thousand cats had come to this specific place to do their business.


Example 2: (Metaphor) The alley was a black hole into which every piece of trash, every sinister sound, every dead end had been sucked.

11 comments:

PJ Hoover said...

You gals come up with the best locations! Alleys are useful. Always!

Windsong said...

As always, wonderful job. :) Thanks!
I also like the end part on using words. Very true and helpful. :D

Emily Cross said...

i found this so helpful - thank you so much, my MC is actually blind so you'd be amazed by how much i have to learn in not relying on 'sight' descriptions but touch, smell etc.

Anyhoo i'm sorry if this is a bit out of the blue and 'pluggish by nature', but i've started a writer's forum http://thewriterschronicle.forumotion.net/index.htm
where aspiring authors etc. can come and chat and discuss topics and ideas and basically help each other.

I love blogging but it can be both hard to get a readership and connect with them so i thought a community forum would be a great way to network.

The forum is only starting out but i'm hoping it will grow,

I'd really appreciate it if you could take the time and have a look around.

thanks emily.

Bish Denham said...

Oooooo, I can really see, smell, taste, hear, and feel an alley.

Angela said...

Thanks, every one! I think alley's tend to feature in a lot of 'darker' writing...it's a natural location for shady dealings. :-)

Becca said...

It's a great "stinky" locale, lol

GutsyWriter said...

Thank you so much. I've used all your guidance in my revisions. Taking a Gotham Writers' Workshop. Any comments from anyone are appreciated regarding experience with online classes.

Brown Eyed Girl said...

Vomit

That really got me.

Hmmm. I wonder when or where I can use that vomit imagery.

Thanks!

Mary Witzl said...

Laundry strung from building to building is something you often see in Asian alleys. (Not where I'd fancy airing my pantyhose either, but when space is limited, you have to stretch it, I guess).

Angela said...

Gutsy, good luck in the workshop--I bet it'll be great!

Browneyedgirl, see us writers are strange. But at the same time, if we write that an alley smells like vomit, as a reader, you'll have a instant recognition, right?

Thanks Mary. It's a good point to make that alleys differ in different countries. You might also see balconies with chairs, tables, Barb-b-ques, potted gardens...all kinds of stuff. :-) Location research is important.

Joseph Katz said...

I like the blog post about alleys, as you have some nice words to choose from.

However, I couldn't imagine and alley from example 1. I think because the description could fit a lot of places.

This could be easily fixed by adding a few words to the first clause.

Example 1: The wind was howling like a pack of arctic wolves in the tight alley,

grimey alley, dark alley, etc.

Now everything else said after this, places me deeper in that alley.

Thanks for taking the time to blog. I have actually been working on something similar for some time now.

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